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Which story would you like to continue working on?  Why?

i like to continue to working on at my cooking story, because that story make me feel better and I helped my mom to cooking when she was sick. 

Why is it a good story? 

because that story make me know how to cook right now and I love to help my mom at everything.

How can you make it better?(Don't say, "I can improve my grammar" or " I can write more")

i can write more figurative language in my story, more dialogue, and make it funny so people like to continue my story.

My topic is about a drum kit, now i have a book call drum kit, and  instrument. this is my Link
i found the old drum, and the place that drum make. about the drum. where the drum start, and history of drum.

Topic is just right for me

Topic is just right for me is about the drum, i chose this because it is my favorite instrument. Drum is a coolest instrument i play before, that why i chose drum

Debate

• What did you do well? 
• What could you improve?
• Whose speech did you enjoy the most?  Why?
• What speech did you enjoy the most?  Why?
• What did you enjoy about debate?
• What did you dislike?

I did well at my voice and my body language.

I Need to improve my grammar. 

I enjoy Chau's speech because she give a lot of detail and idea. 

I enjoy everything because they speech well and they give many thing that i need to know.

I enjoy debate so when i'm old i can use that debate to fight with another company.

I don't like this debate.

personal nerrative

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_SP6rLg8O9v-wrlZ3tXrzSeQDPtgnwiLCjSNneFc9CE/edit?hl=en_US

presentation formula

https://docs.google.com/present/edit?id=0AWUo1A3u5vk9ZGZibTI5ZGJfMDVuazlrZGZr&hl=en_US

Writing Reflection 4

Please look at your earlier test drive and review my comments.  What did you do well?  How can you improve? 


my earlier test drive is about the basketball try out, i did well at i have a 5 W and H, more detail. and I need to improve my dialogue. and some more detail.